Repunzel (or is it)

Author's Note:
This is the new conclusion that I wrote to finish Repunzel.  Our twist was that the prince was too heavy to climb up Repunzel's hair.  I am focusing on word choice and voice.

The handsome prince decides to climb Repunzel's beautiful, golden locks to rescue her from the tower.  He places one hand, then the next, climbing up her hair as carefully as he may.  Though his weight was too heavy for her hair to support and within seconds Repuzel's body fell right out of the window.  The princess cracked her neck and drifted onto the prince's arms.  He tried to save her from the cold hands of death, but he was too late and kissed her for the last time. 

Just then the unexpected happened; Repunzel's obviously blonde hair, turned red as she changed into a ginger.  A dead, cold, ginger that no longer had a soul.  The prince cried hysterically as he couldn't tolerate her new hair color and chocked on his own tears.  Dying just next to Repunzel.